Monday, September 22, 2008

Am I Alive???


I was

Still

A bud

Yet to be

Bloomed.

In Hands

Of my own

Admirer

I was

Ushered 

To

Doom. 


Still

I am

Alive.

With my

Petals torn

Apart,

Innocence

Smashed,

And

My soul…

Trampled!!! 

48 comments:

  1. Ouch! :(

    Very touching lines sweetie,with a world of meaning in them.Beautiful!

    Love ya.Hugsssss

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  2. Very few words, carefully choesn to express the misfortune of the little child.
    It was fantastic to express the plight of child abuse.

    Keep penning and that too,soon.

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  3. i dint get that the poem was on child ABUSE until i read indu's comment :P

    i am dumb :(

    wonderful lines moti ;)

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  4. i loved it when i first read it. Now love even more. You conveyed a message through few words only, one really has to be very talented to do this.

    Great work, sweets!! :)

    PS: Div is dumb :P

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  5. .....a declared suffering...a dramatic destiny ...a great soul on a frail body for now...


    .... few words, powerful feelings.....

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  6. A tragedy expressed with torn petals & trampled soul..one very delicate & other deep ..
    TC
    CU

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  7. They say.."be like a rose. It fragrances the hand that crushes it."

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  8. touching.. you did convey a strong message with few words...

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  9. Simple words but well written.

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  10. SAMEERA,

    thnx dear. ur comments always means a lot me me.

    btw congrats.. u bet him atlast :P

    love u..hugs..tc

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  11. INDRAJIT,

    thanks a lot. wud definately kp penning.

    take care

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  12. CHIMPU,

    chal ab say thanks to indu :P

    n r u dumb??... he he yes u r ;)

    thnx shona divvu.

    love u...huggs

    take care

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  13. LENA,

    thnx janu. u r such a fountain of encouragement. glad that u hv loved it even more now.

    now decide pls wthr i am talented or dumb ?? :P

    no div is not dumb , she is shonu :)

    love u..huggs..tc

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  14. OLIMPIA,

    thnx a lot for such a beautiful n encouraging comment.

    have ur love ur blessings always upon me.

    love you mamma...hugs

    take care

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  15. CU,

    yes friend u got the connection btwn d two right.

    thanks a lot.

    take care

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  16. SOLITAIRE,

    it's such a beautiful quotation.

    thanks a lot.

    take care

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  17. PRIYA,

    thanks a lot dear. getting encouragement from a poet like means a lot to me.

    take care...huggsss :)

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  18. I almost teared up. Very simple words yet, powerful.

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  19. nice blog.....
    http://shayrionline.blogspot.com/

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  20. Yes, you are very much alive. The artistic spirit in you will always be blooming for expression. Never let that spirit die out but let it soar to the heights of the heavens and stars. Thanks for your exquisite and heartfelt poem. God bless you and your husband always my friend.

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  21. ha i wish i can be a kid again :P especially during exam times :P

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  22. shukriya ji pasand karne ke liye... pls visit again , thank you g


    sachin
    http://shayrionline.blogspot.com/

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  23. Very hard-hitting opening lines Preeti !!

    You conveyed the message so well in your fews words. Wow !!!

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  24. that poem is soooo touching dear =) I missed visiting your place and I am really glad to be back and looks like I missed a lot already.

    Take care dear.

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  25. I somehow find this IRONY. :)

    Beautiful and touchy!

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  26. Wow!!! So so touching....and so sweet...i jus thot for a while if ppl cud think that well....keep it going...gr8 work

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  27. Hey that hit me straight in the eye. Loved it....

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  28. child abuse. completely aggree with u..some thing which is is very high in our country...
    specially when it comes to girl child...hate those people who girls child as unwanted

    well written

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  29. that's sensible :-).....

    means it was matured ..wonderfully written :)

    simple yet so brilliant...

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  30. Oooh, I love the new look, dearie! As always your soul shines through in everything you do. Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you let alone even stop by but as I'm sure you know from reading- life's been lively lately. :) You can find me at http://written-whispers.com/blog now. :) I hope to see you around soon dearie, peace and best blessing until then.

    PS, wedding pics are up. :)

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  31. awesome words...apt cause...
    first time here and i liked it a lot...

    nice template too, like ayushi says...

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  32. being a victim myself... i have never felt anyone get close to describing the hurt and cheaten feeling.... good job..

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  33. beautiful lines Preeti. so pretty too...*hugs*

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  34. short and really well written !!

    keep posting :)

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  35. hello dear....

    wonderful words ...i am still alive too ;)


    and belated wishes to your blog......and ha love letter written to you was from heart ......
    hope one day i can write this to u :D ;)

    take care and be happy :)

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  36. u own a luvely blog deeer pree I luved it and will cum soon and comment. k

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  37. Significant alive. Simply u drew it beautifully Preeti :)

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  38. came here blog hopping..!!

    and the first read itself was impressive..nice lines..!!

    :)

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  39. Hi Preetilata...

    dropping in here for the first time... heard abt ya from Sameera...

    this is a beautiful verse... Honestly, I know not what gave birth to it but I can tell you that I can relate to it in many ways...

    its easy to write about something particular but it becomes quite special when it gives more than one meaning...

    Simply beautiful...

    take care mate... cheers...

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  40. :D Will catch up on ready tomorrow. You have an award up on my blog.

    http://written-whispers.com/blog/2008/10/12/i-love-your-blog/

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  41. your word choice here is magnificent... this entire piece vividly brings to mind certain images that make me believe that you, the writer, are comforting someone who was once marred in such a way... you are such a beautifully validating writer... love you dearie! I've missed you!!!

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plz.. open d white window :)