Thursday, June 11, 2009

~Dhundhla Aks~



एक साँस मेरी आज भी बाकी है
जो मुझसे ना जाने क्या कुछ कह जाती है.
मैं खो जाती हूँ उस नर्म चादर तले
जहाँ एक आवाज़ आज भी गूँज जाती है.

जो कोना मैने सजाया था
उन यादों की तस्वीरों से
वो आज भी लिपटी रहती है
गिरे ओस की महक से.

कितने मौसम बीत चुके है
कितने सावन बरसे है.
लम्हा लम्हा कितना ये दिल
बरस बरस के तरसा है.

महसूस किया है पल पल फिर भी
कभी कभी उस कोने में-
"कोई खोई परछाई जैसे मुझे
आज भी छू जाती ही".

~***~

ek sans meri aaj bhi baki hai
jo mujhse na jane kya kuch kaha jati hai.
main kho jati hoon us narm chader tale
jahaan ek awaaz aaj bhi gunj jati hai.

jo kona maine sajaya tha
un yaadon ki tasveeron se
woh aaj bhi lipti rahati hai
gire os ki mahak se.

kitne mausam beet chuke hai
kitne saawan barse hai.
lamha lamha kitna ye dil
baras baras ke tarsa hai.

mahasus kiya hai pal pal phir bhi
kabhi kabhi us kone mein-
"koi khoi parchai jaise mujhe
aaj bhi chu jaati hi".

~***~



~Penned this poem on 2nd March' 08 as my comment to this poem by Indrajit who blogs at Eternal Sonatas.

~ Please read the poem by my Tweeny here. Her "Phanhtom of Memories" is a close translation to my poem in english.

~Sorry for not visiting all your blogs. I am hell stuck up in my college works plus there is some problem in my laptop. I will soon visit your blogs.

52 comments:

  1. Bahut hi sunder lekh hai ye aur hum apne aapko khushnaseeb mante hain ki apne is jeewan me aise roohanipan se bhari kavya-rachna padne ko mila.
    Asadharan!!

    Mujhe abhas nehi mann ki kitni gehrai se sincha hai is kavita ko aapne, lekin mujhe abhas hai ki ye koi asamanya Lekhika ke kalam se hi prakat ho sakti hai.

    Maine itna accha kavita Hindi me nehi pada kabhi, aur mai isse accha padna bhi nehi chahta.... Isse accha hriday-sparshi lekh koi aur nehi lih sakta....

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  2. tweeny..i loved i loved it i loved it!!!
    kuch khoye hue ehsaas yaad dila diye teri post ne..

    beautifly written..n trust me evrytime i read it i get goosebumbs..
    :) :)

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  3. love ya!!!!frever...

    u make me smile :) :)

    mmuuuaahhh :) :)

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  4. its beautiful :)..u take care dear...dont stress to much i do understand when ur not around :)....do take care :)..

    urs..hemu..

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  5. tis sounds like a song to the ears.. smthn tat one can jst go on hummin ovr n ovr again.. :-)

    vry beautifully penned! :-)

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  6. u r bond in hindi poetry too :O

    u amaze more n more everyday :)

    bahut achhi kavita thi :)

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  7. "Koi khoyi parchai jaise mujhe, aaj bhi chu jaati hai"..LOVED This line!!..I would make this poem a BIG fave if this was FLickr..
    You should write more in hindi..you're good.
    Btw..reminded me of the song..'IN dino..dil mera'..by metro..it had a line which was like this.."Berang si hai badi zindagi..kuch rang toh bharu..mai apni tanhaayi ke vaaste ab kuch toh karu!"
    loved every word..my fave frm your works so far !!

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  8. read your hindi poetry first time .. really touching !!

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  9. Fal Khayega fal? taja taja fal, khayega, bolna le? eheeeeeeeeee

    Khikhi khi khi.... Auuuppppp...

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  10. hi preeti,
    Really very deeply heart touching .
    Ek hi pal me kitne kitne purane palon ki visit krwa di.

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  11. beautifully written...the feelings we so so beautifully put in Hindi.

    ahh at last i cud come here..:P

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  12. Amazing!
    Mere paas shabd nahi hai ye kehne ke liye ye ki ye kavita kitni sunder and spasht hai! :)

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  13. Good Heavens!!!

    It's tremendous...I owe you a thanks for scripting the hindi words in english...


    Honestly, yaar,

    Mindblowing.

    Keep Writing,

    Wishes

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  14. Indro

    omg that was too much of a complement. i am honoured

    thank you so much.

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    swati

    awww... i love u too a lotttt my tweeny. so happy dat u loved it. n ye poem ke title ka pura credit is urs.

    love u loads.

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    hemz

    thnx a lot dear. u always understnd n that makes u all d more special.

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  15. Muzer

    good u see u back after a long time dearest.

    was it like a song? awww thanx a lot dear. m sooo glad.

    take care.

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    Sourish

    me a bond in hindi poetry!!! u must be joking. lol :p

    thanks a lot dear. a lot means lot. :)

    n m quite mysterious so u bng amazed by me dsnt stop here. i promise i will continue to surprise u. :p

    take care.

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    aayushi

    aayu dear do u know something?...dat u r a sweetheart. :) u always encourage me to do better and better.

    thanks a lot dear. a lot means a LOT.

    i wud try to write more in hindi.

    after reading ur comment the whole day i was listening to that song. i just love d song.

    love u n hugssss :)

    take care always.

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  16. Prats

    this is the first hindi poem on this blog dear. glad that u thought it to be touching.

    thanks a ton. :)

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    Sweet gabru

    ur profile name is way too cute. :p

    welcome to my blog. n m glad to knw that it made u reminiscence over ur memories.

    hope to see u again.

    thanks a lot.

    take care.

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    Priya

    haaa so finally u r here. ye ye yeeee...so very happy.

    thanks a lot for the appreciation dear. :)

    take care. hugs :)

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  17. Akanksha

    awww thanx a lot dear. u r one of thoz who encourages me to no end.

    hugssssssssssss.

    tc :)

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    Standbymind

    Thank you dear. :)

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    Krishanu

    wowwww.... thanks a lot dear. ur appreciation meant a lot to me. i owe u a big thanks for ur beautiful n encouraging commnt.

    take care :)

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  18. chup kar..badi aayi credit dene wali x-(..no crdit to me..the credit fr this whole write up including the title goes to uuuuuuu n only uuuuu samjhi..

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  19. u write great..i am glad i visited :)

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  20. 3rd para is superb.
    so touching...
    thank you n tc

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  21. Thanks for your lovely comment.
    I appreciate for the beautiful poem you have written.Very nice and fantastic poem.I liked it very much.Keep writing.

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  22. waaaaaaaaaaah

    bus anupam rachna ke liye main aur kuch nahi kah sakta ..so expressive ki main ruk sa gaya hoon..

    is sajiv chitran ke liye aapko badhai ..

    vijay
    pls read my new sufi poem :
    http://poemsofvijay.blogspot.com/2009/06/blog-post.html

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  23. Thanks Swathi!!! :P Sorry i dunno Hindi but the rough translation s good!!

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  24. Awe-beautifully-some. Period.

    Guess who's back? :) How have you been? Good luck with college!

    Peace.

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  25. beautifully expressed n well written..
    liked first stanza a lot.. :)

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  26. अद्भुत भाव प्रदर्शन.. पढ़कर ऐसा लगा जैसे

    किसी बारिश में
    मैं भी कहीं भींग रहा हूं,
    मगर मन रीता ही रह गया हो..
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    एक धुवें में बनती सी
    नजर आती है
    जो अगले ही पल
    धूमिल सी हो जाती है..
    एक चांद,
    जो आज आधा है..
    मानों मेरे अधूरे होने के
    अहसास को
    पुनर्जिवित करने की
    एक कोशिश मात्र ही कर रहा है..

    बहुत सुंदर..

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  27. it was a beautiful poem.. i loved it :)

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  28. teri yaadon mein meri suni aankhe chhalak jati hai,
    har boond saawan ki yaad dilati hai,
    apni chaukhat se roj nikalta hun baarish ki talash mein,
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    meri aatma sadiyon se pyasi hai, pyasi hi rah jati hai,
    teri sirf ek jhalak ko aankhein tarsi hi jati hai, tarsi hi jati hai....

    aapki kavita bahut achhi lagi... afsos sirf is baat ka hai ki aapke blog ko itne dino baad kyon dekha maine...

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  29. Wah Wah!! Again a great shyari with a matching photo!!

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  30. I don't know Hindi, so i read the translate one in swati's, and it was craved in between minds. good one!

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  31. lovely writing..i appreciate that you wrote very good hindi poem

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  32. brilliant... beautiful poetry.. keep writing.. I love visiting ur blog

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